Reginald’s Song

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There’s a Cheshire Cat moon

On this Wonderland night.

Let me be your March Hare—

Let’s go out anywhere—

The future is bright.

 

Oh, Alice, where did you go?

What rabbit hole brought you down?

When will you come back to me?

You’re the Tweedle Dum to my Dee—

Of all girls, you wear the crown—

You’re the Queen of my heart, you know.

 

Though the Jabberwock roars,

And the mome raths outgrabe,

I’m your Knight on a horse,

Dressed in white, but of course—

Alice, don’t stay away.

 

Oh, Alice, why can’t you see

You’re more than a game of croquet.

You’re my tea-tray in the sky,

My bottle-blue butterfly—

Alice, how else can I say

You’re all of Wonderland to me?

 

Though the dormouse snores

And the mockturtles cry,

I’ll never be late,

My important date—

Alice, don’t say goodbye.

 

The Briny Beach has too much sand;

Unbirthdays only make me frown;

There hasn’t been a frabjous day

Ever since you went away—

My world has turned upside-down.

Alice, won’t you take my hand?

 

There’s a Cheshire Cat moon

On this Wonderland night.

Let me be your March Hare—

Let’s go out anywhere—

Our future is bright.

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6 responses »

  1. This is definitely the cat’s pajamas. Wow. I was enchanted, tickled, and blessed by the Cheshire Cat moonlight. Kinda makes me want to hang around and see if Alice eventually responds.

    I just followed. Thanks for the magical ride.

  2. Very clever. Your 2 rhyme schemes (abccb and abccba) are both very difficult. I especially like how every other stanza’s rhyme scheme “mirrored” itself (abccba). (It was a nice nod to the looking glass Alice travels through too.)

    The stanza beginning with “The Briny Beach…” seems to logically end with “My world is turned upside down.” Maybe it would read even better as a 5-line stanza without the final line “Alice, won’t you take my hand?” I don’t know–changing it might distort your stanza organization of alternating hexameter and pentameter. Just a thought. 🙂

    • EXCELLENT suggestions! I hadn’t noticed the mirroring thing as a reflection (ha) of the looking-glass Alice goes through. That was an interesting observation.

      The line “Alice won’t you take my hand” is more of a completion line to rhyme with the first line of the stanza; also, it is part of the pleading repetition (“Alice, will you,” “Alice don’t go”) in the other stanzas. I will bear your thoughts in mind, however, should I decide to examine this one for serious revision should I want to publish it.

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